Looking at posting chapters for review

I am thinking of posting some chapters of my book online for people to read and comment on. I'll watermark the chapters, but I'd like to hear from people what they think and any changes that they'd recommend. I'd welcome some comments if you think this is a good idea.

Concept cover art for book 1 of the Author series

This was originally a cover art pencil sketch that my sister did for the book. I colored it for a class assignment and created a flier. Once I get the book finalized, I'll see if she can create an inked version.

This is taken from a scene in the book where Teran (boy in the foreground), Elaina, and Gwydon (man in the background) are fleeing from the enemy, who is torching a farm house that they had recently been staying at.

My sister sketched this when I said that I needed something for the cover that would draw people's interest into reading the story. This was the first concept she came up with and I really liked it. I'll post up some additional concept art for the story soon.

Artwork for book 1

My sister has been creating some artwork for the Will of the Author series. So far she has sent me four drawings of various scenes and one cover graphic. I am really thrilled at the quality of these concept sketches!

Right now the images are fairly large as they were scanned in for reprinting rather than web display. I'll see about reducing them later so that they can be posted up for viewing.

The Will of the Author - Book 1

Well, I've more or less completed the story part for the first book. I introduce several characters, which was my primary focus in this book. However, it still doesn't seem to have that gripping desire to the beginning. Tolkien had a great phrase in the opening of The Hobbit: "Long ago, in a hole in the ground, there lived a hobbit." The beginning of the story is the most important part because it is what will draw people into continuing it to the finish.

So it is now time to go back over it and revise it until it has that feel that I am looking for. Also, some of the other scenes would probably be better told from a different POV than the ones they currently use. Also, I think I need to see about fleshing out the characters a little bit more than just the introducing of them.

The other thing that I want to address is salvation and forgiveness. Of course, God's sovereignty over all is paramount in the series, so I want to address that topic. I am not sure what other doctrinal topics I want to focus on in the first book, especially since I really want to introduce readers to the characters and then address the heavier doctrines in later books. It will be a while before I am fully pleased with this first book. But I suppose that is to be expected.